The 2nd GPS Meeting (7/23/09)
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In attendance: 

        Authors: Culbertson, Goncharov, Lee, Pronko, and Toback
        GPS: Bortoletto, Loginov and Somalwar
        
No questions on the analysis


Notes on the PRL:

        Basically ready to go to the collaboration reading!

Abstract:  Modifty as "We present results of a search for supersymmetry with
gauge-mediated breaking with ..."

==>Done.


p.1

Line 7: Motivation -> Motivations

==>Done.

Line 15: These models solve the "naturalness problem"...->Could mislead as
GMSB is only the theory to solve the naturalness problem.

==>Sentence itself is true. Prefer to leave as it is now. We'll fix it if the
collaboration complains about it.

Line 23 : a detector --> the detector

==>Done.

Line 38: high Et --> high-Et (hyphen)

==>Done.

Line 43:  our new... --> a new

==>Done.

Line 49: It is the first to consider the tau up to 2 ns -> It is the first
search to consider the tau up to 2 ns.

==>Since it sounds incorrect since LEP does non-zero
lifetime search we re-write the sentence as follow:
"We now consider chi10 lifetimes up to 2 ns".

Line 50 and 51: Combine these two paragraphs into one.

==> The paragraph starting in line 51 is the whole new paragraph with differen
subject. So we prefer to leave as it is now.

Line 71: infromatino -> information

==>Done.

Line 78:  and pass --> and to pass

==>Done.

p.2

Line 12-13: Something's busted. Need to rewrite.

==>Done.

Line 17:  our requirements --> these requirements

==>Done.

Line 22 - 26: Rewrite the sentence so that the action starts the sentence.

==>Done. 

Line 33 - 39: The sentence is too long and the same comments as above.

==>Done.

Line 40: METMODEL does not account for.....

==>Done.

Line 58 - 61: Rewrite the sentence to start the sentence with the action.

==> We think the sentence is clear and prefer to leave as it is.

Line 59: considering --> taking into account (only if you like this change)

==>Done.

Line 60: their production cross sections -> their theoretical cross sections

==>Done.

Lines 61 and 63:  where --> when (optional change, only if you like it)

==>Prefer to leave as it is.

Line 74 - 77: Combine two sentences.

==> We think it should be fine as it is.

Line 106: in -> with

==>Done.

p.3

line 8:  Fix this sentence since it makes it sound like the detector volume
is dependent on...

==>Done. We break up this sentence into two since it was too long and there
were many which's. 
"The fraction of chi1 decays that occur in the detector volume, and thus the
acceptance, is dependent on both the lifetime and the masses of the
sparticles [11]."


line 65: well-modeled  (optional)

==>Prefer to leave as it is.

line 80: a world-best --> the world-best

==>Done.

Daniela will ask the spoke people to assign the reading institutions and see
if we can use the same reading institutions as for the gg+X PRD.
The plan is for Eunsin to make the 1.0 version by the end of today along 
with all the responses to the GPS comments. 
GPS (Sunil) will then see if it's ready to release to the collaboration.